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Allisa Sauraan

Anniversary

The wet brunette roaches greased back
in stream-lined ease have not,
as I predicted, carried this place away
board and beam. Though we have fattened
them up on raw cabbage and rind.
Weeding out the weak with poison, we've
bred a stronger strain. They can sense the
direction they should not run.

For one year we've bounced off the
hard pine floor while the cheap grout
split into powder. We've swept up the
dandruff of ruin and rolled on dusty
turquoise sheets beneath a maroon quilt.
All the dirt turned to flotsam and
jetsam riding a wave of happy sweat.

I cannot live anywhere quietly and I
can't walk quietly away when what we've been will
continue stomping beneath the strain of stopped
pipes and broken window frames.
Gasping for breath and then finding
soft space in each other's shadows after
we're gone. The spaces we clawed at
and returned to, sirens silenced in the dive
between shoulder and collar bone,
eviction notices burning between the
brown pads of our feet, will remain like graffiti
scratched into the bus shelter's glass.

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Allisa Sauraan lives in Phoenix, AZ.


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eric d.johnson (amateurhumorist@yahoo.com) from portland, or

alissa in the desert
hello allisa, sometimes to track you down, one may take odd paths. i am happy to see your poetry out there in the world to potetially wreak havoc. i miss you. be good. say hey.


Maria Fraire from Corona, Calif.

Confusing, depressing, unclear
Couldn't get past the morbid impression it gave me, it was poorly written and depressing, unclear and with no direction.


Melanie from Spokane, WA

Thematically strong; maybe unfinished?
This poem's strongest area is its first two stanzas. In the last stanza, the language evokes a frantic tone, but supports it with some wonderful and powerfully conveyed images ("sirens silenced in the dive between shoulder and collarbone". . .), but these may get lost in the less than precise diction which carries them. With a little revision, zoning in on vague statements like "what we've been" and making them as concrete as the imagery and language of the first two stanzas, this could be a great poem.

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